英语作文写作技巧

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如何写出满分作文
一、写出正确句子 观察下面的句子 错句:It was raining hard, they could not work in the fields. 修改: It was raining hard; they could not work in the fields. It was raining hard. They could not work in the fields. It was raining so hard that they couldn’t work in the fields. They couldn’t work in the fields because it was raining hard. It was raining hard, so they could not work in the fields. (Which one is preferable depends on the context and the writer’s intention.)

二、简单句、并列句与复合句的转化
一篇文章含有的句子具有种类的多样性, 可以是简单句、并列句与复合句。三种句式配 合使用会产生错落有致的美感。我们了解一下它们的特点:
简单句、并列句与复合句的特点

句子

优点

缺点

简单句 强劲有力, 意思清晰, 与长句子配合使用会产生 如果全文是简单句, 评卷教师可能认为语法水

句式的多样性美感

*有限

并列句 意义对称、对比、对仗、对偶, 读起来错落有致 用多了显得枯燥

复合句 主要意义在主句, 次要意义在从句, 逻辑泾渭分 语法容易错, 即使对了, 句子太长读者理解有困

明, 语言读来有气势



结论

三种句式配合使用会产生错落有致的美感

1. 合并简单句成为复合句或并列句 例句:My mother works in a bank. My mother is forty-eight. 第一种方法:合并为并列句: My mother is forty-eight and she works in a bank. 第二种方法:运用引导词连接为复合句: My mother is forty-eight, who works in a bank. 2. 将下列简单句连成复合句或并列句。 (1) For some people mathematics is a great pleasure.
They are able to think absolutely.
(2) A team of management consultants was called in to make an investigation. Production had dropped 14 percent over the past year.
(3) I visited my uncle. I had not seen my uncle for eight years.
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(4) The husbands discussed sports. The wives discussed their children.
(5) We hoped the rain would soon stop. We would hate to spend the whole day amusing ourselves indoors.
(6) I will apply for a teaching job in the university. I may be able to remain in school and pursue a career I like.
(7) World WarⅡended in 1945. There soon began the cold war

(8) Jane Eyre was sent to Lowood Asylum. Jane Eyre was treated harshly in the institution.
(9) Many readers criticized the book severely. The author had to make major revisions in the second edition.
(10) Ptolemy believed the earth was the center of the universe. Copernicus believed the earth and other planets revolved around the sun.
答案:将下列简单句连成复合句或并列句。 1. For some people who are able to think absolutely, mathematics is a great pleasure.

2. A team of management consultants was called in to make an investigation, because production had dropped 14 percent over the past year.
3. I visited my uncle, whom I had not seen for eight years. 4. The husbands discussed sports, while the wives discussed their children. 5. We hoped the rain would soon stop, because we would hate to spend the whole day amusing
ourselves indoors. 6. I will apply for a teaching job in the university, if I may be able to remain in school and pursue
a career I like. 7. After World WarⅡended in 1945, there soon began the cold war. 8. Jane Eyre was sent to Lowood Asylum and treated harshly in the institution. 9. Because many readers criticized the book severely, the author had to make major revisions in
the second edition. 10. Ptolemy believed the earth was the center of the universe, but Copernicus believed the earth
and other planets revolved around the sun.
三、扩写 扩句是在基本句型的基础上, 添加各种修饰成分, 使句子得到扩展, 即根据表达的需求
增加定语, 状语, 同位语等成分, 或者举例子补充细节内容, 或者添加谚语俗语等。 I. 句子扩写:请根据要求将下列简单句进行扩句。
1. We arrived in Sanya. (添加副词) 扩写:We arrived in Sanya, happily and excitedly. 2. I like to make friends with my classmates. (添加定语从句) 扩写:I like to make friends with my classmates, who have the same interest as me. 3. We were happy and returned home. (添加状语从句) 扩写:We were happy and returned home after we had finished collecting all the rubbish. 4. I like reading books. (通过举例补充细节) 扩写:I like reading books, such as novels, short stories, magazines and newspapers.

5. We should study hard. (添加谚语) 扩写:As we all know, “Practice makes perfect”. So we should study hard. 6. I often join in many activities. (添加目的状语) 扩写:I often join in many activities in order to communicate with other students and broaden my mind. II. 篇章训练 试题要求:假如你是一名中学生, 请以 My colorful school life 为题, 写一篇短文。要求 100个字左右。开头和结尾已经给出, 不计入总数。
要点提示:1:上课认真听讲
2:课后完成作业
3:经常参加体育锻炼
4:去图书馆阅读
学生*作:
I’m a junior middle school student and I understand what I’m studying for. I have been working hard.
I listen to the teacher carefully. I finish my homework after class. I often take exercise. I often read in the school library.
May there always be colorful life around my school.
(老师点评:该学生能完整的写出各个要点, 没有出现太大的语法错误, 表达通顺, 单 词拼写无误。但是很明显字数不够, 没有达到100个字左右, 字数不够是很多学生面临的共同 问题。其次, 句子的表达过于*淡无奇, 没有句式多样化和使用高级词汇, 固定搭配、固定 短语等使表达地道。而且, 没有使用连接词, 上下文的连接不够顺畅。)

步骤一:扩展句子 1: 增加目的状语从句 I listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say. 2: 增加定语从句 I finish my homework after class, which is a piece of cake for me. 3: 举例说明 I often take part in exercise with my classmates, such as playing football, going swimming
and playing badminton, etc. 4: 增加时间状语从句 I often do some reading in the school library when I have nothing to do after class.
步骤二:润色句子 (老师讲解:润色句子包括词语的选择与句型的运用。比如可以用高级词汇, 短语和固定搭 配来替换一般词汇。增加*惯表达句式, 倒装句, it 当形式主语和形式宾语, 非谓语动词等, 使用多种句式, 使其多样化。)
1: 把第一句换成 it 当形式主语的用法, 使句式多样化。 It is necessary for me to listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say. 2: 增加了 take…seriously 和 in time 两个短语, 是句子更加生动。 I take homework seriously and finish it in time, which is a piece of cake for me. 3: 增加了 in order to do sth 目的状语和 different kinds of 使句子的意思更完整。 In order to strengthen my body, I often take part in different kinds of exercises with my

classmates, such as playing football, going swimming and playing badminton etc.
4: 使用过去分词短语当状语, 再添加短语 develop the habit of …使文章增加亮点
Interested in reading books, I develop the habit of going to the library and do some reading on my favourite books.
步骤三:连句成篇 “过渡词”在文章中起着承上启下的作用, 它好比一座桥梁, 能将全文各句有机地联系在一起, 从而使句子不再是孤立的独立的个体。使用表示转折, 并列, 递进, 因果关系等连词把句子 连接起来, 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分, 使全文结构紧凑, 使上下文更加通顺, 逻辑性 更强。
I’m a high school student and I understand what I’m studying for. I have been working hard. (原文已给)
First of all(过渡词), it is necessary for me to listen to the teachers carefully in the class so that I can understand what the teachers say. What’s more(过渡词), I take homework seriously and finish it in time, which is a piece of cake for me. In addition(过渡词), In order to strengthen my body, I often take part in different kinds of exercises with my classmates, such as playing football, going swimming and playing badminton, etc. Finally(过渡词), interested in reading books, I develop the habit of going to the library and do some reading on my favourite books.
May there always be colorful life around my school.(原文已给)


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